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18 Apr 2018 (UTC)

#0 neko [JBZjYBQ]

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April 18 wednesday
Today,i had a small spat with my roomie.actually,i haven't been very friendly to her all the time,maybe because i think she is not beautiful or intelligent enough .I know it's stupid to judge a person by her apperarance and external condiction .
Why am so sobbish,why i acted like a jerk.
All men are born equal,I can't act like a snob,it's wrong.I want to be nice ,but i'm so sensitive,i always stick out my thorn ,and hurt people when i'm not careful .Maybe i'm not fit to live in a crowd ,I should be alone.

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#1 胖猫 [UzQmJCA]

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April 18 wednesday

Today,i I had a small spat with my roomie.a Actually,i I haven't been very friendly to her  all the time, maybe because iI think she is not beautiful or intelligent enough .I know it's stupid to judge a person by her apperarance and external condiction .

Why am so snobbish,(arrogant), why iI acted like a jerk.

All menhumans are born equal,I can't act like a snob,ly, I shoudn't be snobbish (arrogant), it's wrong. I want to be nice , but iI'm so sensitive,i I always stick out my thorn ,and hurt people when iI'm not careful . Maybe iI'm not fit to live in a crowd ,socialized, I should be alone.

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You are not a jerk at all, because you are a person who try to change yourself nicer, real jerk always blames on the others only :-)

By the way, I think the word of "arrogant" is more appropriate rather than "snobbish" in this case??

18 Apr 2018 (UTC)

#2 neko [JBZjYBQ]

(Non-native)

Yeah,you are right ,"arrogant" is more appropriate ,thanks for your advice.

19 Apr 2018 (UTC)

#3 ねこざむらい [hwRFIw]

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April 18 wednesdayWednesday, April 18

Today,i I had a small spat with my roomie.a  Actually,i I haven't been very friendly to her.  all the time,It's maybe because iI don't think she is not beautiful or intelligent enough .  I know it's stupid to judge a person by their apperarance and external condiction .

Why am so sobbish,whyiwas I so selfish?  Why did I acted like a jerk.?

All menpeople are born equal,I ca.  I shouldn't act like a snob, because it's wrong.  I want to be nice , but iI'm so sensitive,i.  I always stick out my thorn ,out and hurt people when i'm not careful .carelessly.  Maybe iI'm not fit tofor liveing in a cgrowup,and ,I should be left alone.

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20 Apr 2018 (UTC)

#4 [JUZUMFY]

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Reviced one is even worse (lol)

20 Apr 2018 (UTC)