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06 Aug 2024 (UTC)
#0 Midori [FDZVCCM]
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Last updated 06 Aug 2024 (UTC)
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I have tried not to translate from Chinese to English, please give me some advice and correct for me, thank you.
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English
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I am interested in studying different languages, hoping to speak like a native someday. Recently, I realized it is not easy to achieve.

Yesterday, a man from the United Kingdom visited the temple, where I have lived for over ten years. I talked with him for about 30 minutes introducing the history of the temple and our charity activities.

After that, I found out the most important thing is to speak fluently and with confidence, instead of trying to speak like a native.
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#1 MY [NRRDY4k] 
I am interested in studying different languages, hoping to with the hope of speaking like a native someday.
Recently, I realized ithat achieving that is non't easy to achieve.
Yesterday, a man from the United Kingdom visited the temple, where I ha've lived for over ten years.
I talspoked with him for about 30 minutes, introducing the history of the temple and our charity activities.
After that, I found ouward, I realized that the most important thing is to speak fluently and with confidence, instead ofrather than trying to speakound like a native.
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[Sentence 1] A comma was removed to make the sentence smoother.

[Sentence 2] Adding "that" helps clarify the subject.

[Sentence 3] A comma was removed to make the sentence smoother.

[Sentence 4] I prefer "speak" to describe a more general situation instead of "talk."

[Sentence 5] "Afterward" provides a smoother transition than "after that."
"Realize" better reflects your insight than "find out."
"Sound like a native" is more idiomatic.
07 Aug 2024 (UTC)
#2 Midori [FDZVCCM]
Thank you very much.
07 Aug 2024 (UTC)
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