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2018/01/22

#0 ats [KEOHKVc]

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はじめまして！

本業は大学院生ですが、非常勤講師もしています。

横浜の中心部に住んでいます。

地理と語学（英語、フランス語）が好きです。旅行も好きですが、海外経験は多くないです。

性格はマイペースで慎重、倹約家です。また、収集癖があります（記念硬貨など）。また、スポーツは特にしないのですが、今から頂点を目指せる競技があったら本気で取り組みたいですね（笑）自分の世界を広げたいです！

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Hi, Nice to meet you☺

I'm a graduate student and a part-time teacher.
I live in central Yokohama.

I like foreign language (English and French) and geography.
Ialso like traveling, but I have traveled overseas just several times.

I am easygoing, prudent, and frugal.
I have the habit of collecting commemorative coins, etc.

I don't play any sports, but I want to try one, if I can achieve the top even from now haha!
I want to broaden my world!

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#1 [NogodXY]

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Sorrynobody has corrected your English so far, but actually your English very good and nobody has better English ability than you^^

2018/01/24

#2 Jen.L [YFaZh5A]

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Hi, Nnice to meet you☺

I'm a graduate student and apart-time teacher.

I live in central Yokohama.

I like foreign languages (English and French) and geography.

I also like traveling, but I have only traveled overseas just several times.

I am easygoing, prudent, and frugal. (This sentence is grammatically correct, but we rarely use "prudent" to describe a personality. More common options are: cautious, careful, sensible etc. )

I have the habit of collecting commemorative coins, etc.

I don't play any sports, but I want to try one, if I can achieve the top even from now haha!

I want to broaden my whorldizon!

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Hi, I hope this it helpful. Ihardly found any grammatical errors, only a few word choices that could be improved. In order to write better you can also experiment with more variation in sentencestructure :D

2018/01/25